Deliverance :0)
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Well getting used to this poetry :0)
Deliverance
Today is a whole new day the poet wrote
He scratched his head
Rubbed his throat as he compiled his line
Time began thousands of years ago
A man a women, a garden
An apple, the fatal tree
One bite then revelation, a deadly truth
Casting out of paradise
No looking back
Lost dreams because of the birth of sin
A man a women now growing old
A tree of life taken away
Cold, heat Hunger pangs
Childbirth pain
Paradise lost, now through
Toil and labor strain
Sweat of brow bones brittle grow old
What’s this a prophet
With a message, bold
He tells of hope that will come from a tree
Of a redeemer who soon will set we free
His mission at birth is death for us
No greater love has our God for us...
Than to nail his only son
On to that tree for to set this writer
And reader free...
Come one come all
Victims of the fall
Our deliverance is near
Our deliver has come
To right the wrong ( Authors note..some readers prefer the word WRITE..play with and see)
To gather the roaming misguided throng
Back in his fathers arms
Where we truly belong
Our deliverance has come!
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Succinct and beautifully written. Some of the words seem weird to me, but you put it all together in harmony and the ultimate message given have you ;-)
After reading your profile, I wondered where you stood, now I know! Personally, I think there is a place for religion as it says in James 1:27 (KJV), "Pure religion and undefiled before God and the Father is this, To visit the fatherless and widows in their affliction, and to keep himself unspotted from the world."
I think you'll like that one - to me it stems from Jesus's love, not rules and chains of false doctrine.
Sorry for the long and somewhat unrelated comment - glad you found me.
Thanks Lady-E :0)
Great to see you!!!
Mike :0)
Lovely and Inspiring.
It's a message of hope. I enjoyed it.
Tillsontitan :0)))))
Good morning my fair lady!!! Thank you for your very encouraging comment my friend and I pray that when you pass on you will end up in our fathers arms and that tugging you will feel at your elbow will be me saying
" come on Tilly enough already my turn "
Lol Mike :0) have a great week!!!
How romantic to be religious! ...back in his father's arms...would that we will all wind up that way. Your poetry is growing. Great job. Loved it.
Hi Mike! I had to come back and read this again. I love the "freedom" that God allows us! Free from guilt, from pain, from haunting memories. He says, "let it all go."
Thanks frogy fish :0)
Right is fine with Me...what ever the new reader wants :0)
Have a great week in Him!!!!
Mike :0)
Your words of truth just kept flowing along...telling the story with some uniquely expressed thoughts. Enjoyed it...but think I would vote for 'right'. OK? :-)
Heart4word ;0)
Thank you so much for commenting...God bless you this week !!!
Mike :0)
Yes I believe we have to be in a place, where we say I give up! No longer am I going to try and do things my way? There are just some things beyond our control...when we realize how God's ways are perfect for us. He wants to show us the freedom we can have, because of what Jesus did for us:) Like the picture of the chain braking, and the person was able to run free:)
Elenin :0)
"Mike, I feel that a misspelled word cab be a beautiful thing, especially to you poets. ‘Write’ as written had more meaning for me, personally, than the ‘correct way’. Others might well feel the same."
Thank you so much for your great comment and yes I whole heartedly agree with you!!!! as I,m new to the great world of peotry and spelling ..lol...i appreacate all the input!!!!so I will make a correction with an option for the reader to decide for themselves..write ? right? ;0)
Allow me to bring attention to another awesome Hub. I am not sure about the protocol here, but my intentions are only for good.
"You know as far as I,m concerend you may do anything you please dear Elenin on my hubs..bar copy LOL..I welcome all you great input My new friend..Thank you
Sincerly Mike :0)
Stages of me :0)
Thank you so much for reading...have a blessed weekend My dear sister :0)
Mike :0)
Mike, I feel that a misspelled word cab be a beautiful thing, especially to you poets. ‘Write’ as written had more meaning for me, personally, than the ‘correct way’. Others might well feel the same.
Allow me to bring attention to another awesome Hub. I am not sure about the protocol here, but my intentions are only for good.
http://snizinspiredbygod.hubpages.com/hub/The-Lord
/The-Lord-Has –Done-This-6650831
Please take the time to read the poem before reding the following.
There are two ‘misspelled’ words in this short epic. The first, in the first sentence - site
“The Lord has done this and it is marvelous in our site”
It is indeed a marvelous website, imo. For he who has sight, let him see.
That first ‘misspell’ challenged me to look up the second - nand
“The Lord has this nand it is marvelous in our life”
Nand
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
NAND may stand for:
• Logical NAND ("Not AND"), a binary operation in logic.
o NAND gate, an electronic gate that implements a logical NAND.
o NAND, Solid State Drive used to retain data integrity when a system loses power or is turned off.
• NAND Flash Memory, a type of Flash Memory technology. For more information, see Flash memory.
A gate that implements logic, a drive to retain integrity even when the system loses power, a type of flash memory.
Nand fits perfectly in my eyes. Write on.
Love your poem :)
AMA :0)
"and is that "right" or 'write"? as in to correct or take note of... either way works but they send a different message."
Its 'Right' thank you so much for spotting that error..yes it would send a different meassge!!!
Mike :)))
ok corrected....Rapture..never thought about that one..still out to lunch on that one..LOL
Up and beautiful and interesting.
"Our deliverance is near
Our deliver has come
To write the wrong
To gather the roaming misguided throng"
the rapture? and is that "right" or 'write"? as in to correct or take note of... either way works but they send a different message.
Susie Q :0)
thank you my kind friend for dropping by...hope all is well with you today down south in the land of sunshine and great fruit on the tree...have a great one!!!
In Jesus Mike :0)
Voted up and beautiful, Mike. The garden is where it all began!
B.malin :0)
Thank you for your great coment and continued support..yes it is ..having fun with this new poetry thing :0))))
Later Mike :0)
From start to finish, this one is "Poetic Justice" for all who read it. Nicely written, "Our Deliverance is Near"...
Elenin;0)
Thank you so much for that great encourging comment my new found fan ;)))))
Have a great day where ever it has taken you !!!
Mike :0)
Ic??? ic,,, ah, I see :D
Fine composition. Great message. Carry on new poet, por favor.
Morning SHANAYA :0)
Thank you so much for dropping by for coffee this bright and cheery morning!!! LOL
Yes I liked that line when I wrote it..actully it was like the glue that held it all together...
Have a wonderful day !!!
Mike :0)
Hello Sir Mike! Good morning and so Wonderful beginning as well. You started your day with a True message I must say.
I like this line very much 'Lost dreams because of the birth of sin'
Thanks for sharing. Voted up, beautiful, awesome.
With lots of respect
from SHANAYA:)
Morning Ardie :0)
thank you for your encourging words ...have a wonderful day..keep your chin up its going to get even better :0)
Mike :0)
Excellent storytelling my friend. "Where we truly belong" - strong line.
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Alexander Mark :0)
Pleased to meet you Bro...glad you found me and thank youfor reading and leaving such a great comment...thanks for the scripture ref!!!!
Have a great week in Jesus!!!
Cheers!!
Mike :0)